Friday, February 27, 2009

Please excuse me while I have a proud mummy moment

I won't be offended if you don't want to read this entry but I just wanted to share.
Ellie has been going to creative writing class every couple of weeks after school . It's run by the headmistress and she allows them to let their imaginations run riot and they can sit, lie, stand where ever they want and feel comfortable - it's totally informal.
Well Ellie came back with a poem she'd written and after reading it I suspiciously questioned where her ideas had come from and whether she'd copied pieces or ideas from things she'd heard or read. Sh assured me she hadn't and was most put out that I'd think that. Here it is.

My Magic Box by Ellinor

I will put in my box

the shimmer of a sparkling star on a simmering night
the bark from the mouth of a black Jasper Labrador
the top of my Ted touching the television

I will put in my box

a snowflake with a falling heart
a hat of the finest tatan from Loch Lomond
a swirling star from an eternal space

I will put in my box

four orange wishes spoken in Welsh
the last cough of an old father
and the first winkof a black fly

I will put in my box

A violet moon and a multicoloured sun
A mummy on a broomstick
And a witch on a simmering pyramid

My box is made from the finest velvet
With sugar on the lid and books in the corners
Its hinges are the colour of the sun

I shall read in my box
on the top of a million hearts beating together
then find a diamond
the colour of the moon

Age: 9
Feb 2009


A Woman Of No Importance said...

Jan, she is so clever; That was beautiful, thank you! x

Clare - Aimetu said...

Jan that is a beautiful poem - she will go far with her English if she can dothis at 9 - give her a HUGE HUG, well deserved:)

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Maggie said...

It's beautiful poem, you are right to be a proud mummy :-)

Thanks for sharing

Chairman Bill said...

I looked up portions of this on the net to see if I can find it elsewhere, as I simply couldn't believe it was something a 9 year-old could come up with.

Couldn't find it anywhere. Obviously she's an artist in the making - and a good one.

Mylene said...

What a beautiful poem! Thanks for sharing.

Raph G. Neckmann said...

What an amazing poem! Really imaginative and profound. Do encourage her to write more!

Joke said...

Jan, what a talented daughter you have, I loved reading it! Thanks so much for sharing :) and be proud!!

Jan said...

Thank you everyone for the lovely and encouraging comments.
I have to say this poem was a real surprise to me
My dh went to see her teacher this week - I wanted to go but couldn't get home from work in time. Her teacher said that academically she is way ahead of her age and is to be encouraged. This is good in the village school but may prove to be a challenge when she goes on to Secondary school where 'different' is not encouraged , we'll just have to wait and see.
Thank you again folks

Scriptor Senex said...

Wow! Most impressive. What a wonderful imagination and so well expressed. I wonder what I would put in my box?

GB said...

Absolutely wonderful. I'm dumbfounded. Why would anyone not want to read such an entry? My first visit to your blog and I come across such a gem. I'll be back.

Tracy said...

Found this post through Scriptor Senex's blog...

What a wonderful poem! Kudos to your gifted daughter!

Scriptor Senex said...

Tracy - inspired by Ellinor - has asked - what would you put in your magic box having seen your blog because of Ellinor's new found fame....

Steve Gravano said...

What a wonderful poem! Keep up the good work and write more!

shabby girl said...

I'm so impressed! That took some real imagination and creativity!

Tracy said...

Just wanted to share that Ellinor's inspiration continues...

Two wonderful magic box responses. :)

C. Beth said...

That is fantastic! I'm sorry it took me so long to pop over here and read it. What a talented gal you have there!!

C. Beth

C. Beth said...

P.S. I just realized you aren't the one who sent me the link--it was a reader, Tracy, from . Your daughter has fans! :)

marjean said...

We will allow you your "proud mommy". Thanks for sharing.